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  • on The Moods by Fannie Stearns Davis, on February 28, 2007
    Take out the lines after the first three lines of the first verse and I think this piece would be a lot better. The repetition is a killer in this piece. It made my mind wander from the picturesque emotional pull of the first three lines.

    I really liked the second verse as its own entity and the third just seemed to be the first verse just laid out as a finish with the wrap-up of the last line.

    My opinion.