EternalWings

• Last seen on Dec 8 10:13 PM 2007. Member since February 14, 2006.
• I have 154 poems, 12 stories

My other items

• Let It Be A Lesson at allpoetry
  Let it show your heart
  Exactly where to turn.
• Fire Reflected Tears at allpoetry
  In Loving Memory Of
  Mark V. Davidson
• Storywrite Motto at storywrite
  You are given only one life to live, so live it.

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• on The Secret by Eiluned Lewis, on September 5, 2004

  i like this poem a lot. i love the twice five fingers twice five toes that is so cute. plus my sister has a 2 month old baby boy and it just reminds me of them
• on Parting by Boris Pasternak, on July 21, 2004

  This poem, i feel, is a man having a hard time, a rough life. But then a woman came to him and his life settled down. He had become much happier until the day she left him. This poem takes place while this person is crying right after the departure of his lady. Near the end he starts to clean up the mess she left. (I'm assuming this was after a fight or something). He put all her things back in her drawers and when he went to pick up her sewing that was not finished yet, he poked himself with the pin. After this happen i believe it is saying that this reminded him of her and of who she is, and he began to cry again.
  
  This poem made me feel very sad and made me wonder about why the two had parted. I believe my favorite parts would have to be stanzas five, seven, and eight. The three stanzas were just so cute and perfectly written. They all flowed perfectly and made me smile.
  
  This is an excellent poem. I have not read another from oldpoetry that has ever been this good. I had to reread this poem a few times just so I could really feel it but once I did, I noticed all the words, and I believe I understood it correctly. I love the way it was written and the rhyming was beautiful.
  
  I can think of only a few technical errors that would sound better if changed. The first I noticed was that "And why is it that all the time" should maybe have a comma after it, just to make it easier to read and for the flow to run better. I also believe that even though "Till" is okay, I think 'Til would be better because then it is obvious that it is short for until. This poem is excellent in keeping the tenses straight though so great job on that. Excellent poem.
• on The Broken Drum by Edgar Albert Guest, on July 21, 2004

  I believe this poem, to the author, meant that not all things are as good as they appear to be. Meaning that pleasures may make you happy for a while, but they soon will get boring. And by buying pleasures, there is always something new to get, and the people that buy pleasures are always wanting more; almost like nothing is ever good enough. It also means that you dont need pleasures to live your life comfortably. Any person can live there life fine without having things that are unnecessary. For example, a remote control light switch or something like that. Most pleasures just help people who are lazy. To me, it could also mean that curiosity is not always a good thing, because it could cause bad things to happen. In the story the child breaks his drum because of his curiosity.
  
  This poem makes me feel sad that he broke his drum, but also happy, because he could have learned a few lessons from this. I think this is an excellent poem. I love the flow and just the idea of the poem is excellent. It is very cute and made me smile. I love poems like these that people learn lessons from and where there is a moral. This poem was great for being old peotry. I don't like a lot of old poetry because it is harder to understand, however this poem was not hard, and still very good.
  
  
  The only thing that really confuses me a little in this poem, is the fact that it jumps from past to present quite a bit. This makes it sound, not really choppy, but just off a little. I'm not sure how to explain it, but it just doesn't sound quite right. Like from going from "wrecked his drum" to "hope is." I just don't like how it does that. It sort of takes away from the poem. But, this poem was excellent in grammatical errors and spelling errors though; for I did not find any. Great poem!
  Edited on Jul 21, 5:31 p.m. because ''.
• on You And I by Henry Alford, on July 21, 2004

  The poem is telling one, that the narrator is in love and wants the love of the other. In the beginning, the person is lonely and is waiting for his love to help him and to help him feel better. the author writes that the narrator wants the two to be together.
  
  I thought this poem to be very sweet. The fact that the man, or atleast I am assuming it's a man, is really in love with the this woman. I believe that he wants her in his life very much. In the poem it says "Companion, comforter and guide and friend," - this I thought was very sweet and showed that he really does love her. It also says "Life is so short, so fast the lone hours fly," - This is very true. I believe this is saying that people need to just take chances, because life is too short to always be careful about everything. Basically, everything deserves a chance. And that if you do not give it a chance, the chance with fly by and will not come again. I believe it is saying to take chances on love, because if nobody took any chances, there would be a serious population decrease because no one would get together. No one would find their love, if no one took a chance on someone else.
  
  Anyway, one technical error I noticed is on the second line, I believe that there should be a comma after the word, "tired." One other thing is that when it says "does thought ask thought," I believe that there should be a question mark and not a sentence, because it asks a question. That is all I have to say. Excellent poem though.
  Edited on Jul 21, 5:02 p.m. because ''.