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  • on The Best is Good Enough by James Whitcomb Riley, on March 10, 2004
    Excellent Technical Review Emphemeral! Well done and complete response.

  • on The Best is Good Enough by James Whitcomb Riley, on March 9, 2004
    Hmmm MBunny. I think this would have sufficed:

    "I see that he uses two enjambed lines in all but the second and fifth stanzas, in which he only uses one, but he certainly gives himself plenty of roaming capability ....he uses it to help himself adhere to the strict villanelle form .... which makes the transition from rhyme to rhyme feel easier, and less practiced .. it's easy to read, but not to fall into a boring sing-song rhythm...."

    Certainly "name calling" in the class is not allowed. Not allowed also is calling yourself negative names, MBunny. We're focusing on the Technical aspects and use of poetry tools, not personalized editorals.

  • on The Right Thing by Theodore Roethke, on March 5, 2004
    He called it a Villanelle. Listed as a Villanelle in all kinds of books, Zara2.

  • on Battle by John Davidson, on March 5, 2004
    Yes, A Villanelle.
    Battle (Villanelle)

    The war of words is done;
    The red-lipped cannon speak;
    The battle has begun.


    The web your speeches spun
    Tears and blood shall streak;
    The war of words is done.


    Smoke enshrouds the sun;
    Earth staggers at the shriek
    Of battle new begun.


    Poltroons and braggarts run:
    Woe to the poor, the meek!
    The war of words is done.


    "And hope not now to shun
    The doom that dogs the weak,"
    Thunders every gun;


    "Victory must be won."
    When the red-lipped cannon speak,
    The war of words is done,
    The slaughter has begun.

    Edited on Mar 05, 10:16 because ''.