Simi

• Last seen on Feb 13 10:19 AM 2006. Member since February 14, 2006.
• I have 65,535 comments, 91 poems, 8 stories

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• on The Right Thing by Theodore Roethke, on March 13, 2004

  I would say this is definitely a #3.
  The poetry definitely is based on the villanelle form but veers away from it many times
  
  From line 1 to Line 6 probe changes to delve slightly changing the refrain.
  Again Line 12 should be refrain of line 1
  Let others probe the mystery if they can
  or atleast line 6
  Let others delve the mystery if they can
  
  instead the poet uses line 3
  The right thing happens to the happy man.
  
  
  Simialrly Line 15 should be a refrain
  The right thing happens to the happy man.
  
  Instead the poet uses a completely new line
  Takes to himself what mystery he can,
  
  Similarly line 18 should be a refrain of Line 1 or 6
  Insread he uses a completely new line again
  Till mystery is no more; No more he can
  
  So I would say he completely drifted out of the traditional form.
  
  Also,
  the rhyming style isnot consistent with the villanelle form.
  
  
  
• on Ode to the West Wind by Percy Bysshe Shelley, on March 12, 2004

  As I said I have read it many times beofre, though not at oldpoetry, but I was tempted to read it again here. IT blew me away againa sit always does. The imagery and the descriptiveness is simply amazing. As is the rhyming structure.
  
  Will take from both a deep, autumnal tone,
  Sweet though in sadness. Be thou, Spirit fierce,
  My spirit! Be thou me, impetuous one!
  
  Sweet though in madness. Typical Shelley play on words. He makes negative words appear oh so appealing
  
  Again the last line
  If Winter comes, can Spring be far behind?
  underlining the inherent optimism whoch mark most of his poetry
  
  Edited on Mar 12, 5:01 p.m. because ''.
• on Paradiso (Italian) by Dante Alighieri, on March 12, 2004

  Since I dont have a clue about Italian. I did read part of it and get what you mean about the sound. i was trying to hear the metered feel and I think i nailed down the rhyming a little too
• on Inferno (English) by Dante Alighieri, on March 12, 2004

  Hmm first thing I noticed is it is written by Dante the creator of the form, but it doesnt look a lot like terza rima to me, atleast not like what I expected anyway. I am getting the hang of imabic pentameters now.
  
  That said, I thought this looked more like a novella than a poem, but it does rhyme. Some of the lines taper off abruptly and some lines have only one word in them for no reason that I can figure out, so i again assume this si because of the translation.
  
  Overall, though it took me five days to read it all, I enjoyed it. I just wish I could read it in Italian