I lift my heart as spring lifts up
A yellow daisy to the rain;
My heart will be a lovely cup
Altho' it holds but pain.
For I shall learn from flower and leaf
That color every drop they hold,
To change the lifeless wine of grief
To living gold.
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Ancient alchemists attempted to transform cheap or worthless metals into valuable ones such as gold. This poem takes the definition of "alchemy" and applies it to human emotion perfectly. The title caught my attention because I have a background in science, especially chemistry, and I was pleasantly surprised to see the idea used poetically.
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This is kind of hopeful. Speaks of having a heart full of pain, but the rain can wash the disease away, and a new flower will bloom.
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Liked the lilt of this poem and especially the last two lines. Giving the adjective "living" to gold takes one aback.
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The lady in this poem is an optimist, very much a survivor trying to see better things to come – whilst there is a plant assuredly a flower will follow -or whilst there is life there is hope - Albert.
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This is a poem about a woman who lifts herself up through her pain to take another stab at life, learning with each day that passes to heal a brilliant write, truly a write from the heart...........
Sanity.
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This is a woman steeling herself against her grief, determined to be positive. The poem is life-affirming, as she gathers strength and inspiration from nature. I love the image of the colour of the leaf or the flower being taken on by its contents; I see green dew on grass, pink on roses. So much said in so few words.
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I also think the meter was off a little in this poem. However I think when read without stops at the end of each line (reading through to punctuation) helps a great deal. This poem has a great message. I guess we only have the life we have been given and we have to find a way to make the best of it.
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pain colors life in the same way that pleasure does, just with a different hue. Both are necessary to formulate the living gold.
Better to take the dull and lifeless mud of isolation, (safety first to avoid pain), and alchemize it to the living gold that relies on pain and pleasure both to make it shine.
this is a wonderful and affirmative poem...beautifully sung.
i do not find the meter to be off. if read straight through without any regard for the line breaks it works. think: of grief to living gold.
This poem is a perfect example of squeezing every bit of color from every phrase and every word. every syllable is employed to maximum effect. Much can be learned from the composition of this piece, and much from its message as well.
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Hmm...I don't like the last line of the poem, as the meter is off and would sound better with more syllables. Though, this was a very meaningful poem. Hearts hold so much pain, and its so sad to know they do...It is the hardest thing in the world to understand the pain of a broken heart, and actually learn to live once more...I know...
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