Me up at does
out of the floor
quietly Stare
a poisoned mouse
still who alive
is asking What
have i done that
You wouldn't have
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Exactly.
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It's amazing how profound this man can be in such a small amount of space and using such a minimal amount of words. How many of us have every really thought about the fact that like all of us here in society, creatures great and small are just trying to survive and do what they were created to do as well? sigh I am in heaven reading one of my alltime favorite poets here.
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Look past the mouse. This is awesome, and I love his opening line.
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AH BOOOO!
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Yeah, the poor mouse just wanted to eat, yet he is murdered by 'you'. Makes you stop and think about the carelessness we use in throwing around sanctity for life. This animal can live b/c it is cute, this one dies b/c it is annoying, or it is tasty. I'm not advocating vegetarianism, i love meat, but I'll be thinking about that next burger I bite into in a different way. At least with a little more respect. Interesting use of the word 'does' at
Me up at does
The juxtaposition of a verb and a noun that Cummings is famous for. Nice write. I think it's funny that my comment is longer than the poem itself.
Peace,
Lo
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This one seems to be more about regret. Using a mouse small and insignificant to show that not living by example can belittle oneself.
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