And their feet move
rhythmically, as tender
feet of Cretan girls
danced once around an
altar of love, crushing
a circle in the soft
smooth flowering grass
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I get a beautiful image of young madiens dancing around a maypole. Their feet bare and smiles broad.
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Sappho has a talent for short poems that speak volumes - literally. There's so much unsaid about this scene - who they are, what they are doing, and why they are doing it. This poem creates an image, and nothing is missing, yet there's so much mystery around that image. It's a fun piece to think about. It could go anywhere, but it is best left as it is - very simple, very vivid. Beautiful.
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A beautiful little poem...the flow of it seemed to come from the rhythm of little feet moving rhythmically, somehow. It held me spellbound with flashing images as I read it...a short poem, true, but even though it is slightly short, so much seems to be said in it, and so many messages and images conveyed...truly a marvelous piece of poetry.
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very good
And their feet move rhythmically,
as tender feet of Cretan girls danced once around an altar of love,
crushing a circle in the soft smooth flowering grass
What a beautiful little poem. It brings up images of pagan magic and love as well as the rythm of the pounding feet to aid in the reading.
A wonderful read.
John
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This has a child like mind set I think. Also a sensuality to each line that makes the verse just seem simplistic yet whole in the end.
A good piece here.
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