There will be a time when it will end.
Be it parting
Be it death
So each passing minute with you
Pendulummed with sadness.
So many times
I looked long into your face.
I could hear the clock ticking.
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has a real helpless feeling, i love it
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allways look on the bright side of life
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he should take his own advice i think -
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"I looked long into your face.
I could hear the clock ticking."
The clock always ticks too fast. -
Wow. What makes it really sad is that it's kind of true. I'm not sure what to say except this guy is totally awesome.
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This is a very deppressive love poem, the saddest I've probably ever read because of course it is true. I can't believe I'm getting points for commenting Milligan poems. I worship that guy by the way.
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deep
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7/10
I couldn't find this as a word 'Pendulummed' I could find 'Pendulum' but not the first. May be it was just an adition to the word, or someone made an error when posting or the writer made an error. Whatever. Another good piece writ.
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This was great. And short, I liked it..it has the unsure quality about time...
Carrie -
i enjoy the emotions this poem brings and though it's short, it's honest and it's point is evident, not confusing like many poems. i like the somewhat subtle use of time and the wording you used around it.
i can understand the emotions pouring out of the screen and so being able to relate i find this poem a great read.
keep penning!
-Keela -
This was really nice... I liked the creativity used on the look of it, too. The spacing before
'Pendulummed with sadness.' (which by the way is my fav line)
and
'I could hear the clock ticking.'
Really made those two lines stand out. I love how he kept the time thing going...'time'..'minute'..'pendulummed'..'clock ticking' thats really nice, i enjoyed this piece -
Wow, this is really really powerful. I'm not sure I understand the line format but it doesn't take away from the words. This line struck home with me:
So many times
I looked long into your face.
I could hear the clock ticking.
Because I feel like this is my life right now. Looking into my boyfriend's face and seeing the clock ticking right in his eyes, waiting for it all to just end. -
Great
I agree with you that everything has its own end, and we can not predict the time we will die... Nice write. Keep it up...
- R3Dd46 -
A second passing everlasting?
No it cannot be
Then every breath from here to death
an open eye will see
~~whims -
This is really sad yet touchingly sweet and loving...it's not like his other peices, but I like it a lot. He was a very talented man, who loved to make people laugh!!! Here's to Spike!!! Smiles...Darianna x
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I can catch the drift here, but it's hard to explain. I feel like I'm trying to capture a cloud of gas with my bare hands. I think I like it.
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I've come across a few Spike Milligan poems on AP, they seem to be popular and with reason. This is very compact and knowing, though I'm not sure whether it isn't a bit morbid
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Good poem
A very solemn poem. I liked it. I think that you did a good job, especially making it short and sweet. Keep Writing! -
Wow all the comments here. This is such a thought provoking piece. I, myself would rather savor each moment with those I love rather than dwell on the fact that my time/their time will, at some point come to an end. I still enjoyed this poem.
Jenna -
'Pendulummed'.....now there's a word I'm gonna have to look up.
This is a powerful piece. So filled with a sadness longing.....longing for what? More time? Happiness?
One can hear the doom.....softly at first, then progressing in volume as the piece progresses.
Well done.
~~~~~ Sincerely, Janet ~~~~~
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Ooh. Fascinating nad indeed sad. Hard how when things draw to an end, life and love and all things wind down like a clock. It's waiting for the big bang that is really only a whimper. Brilliantly done and terribly sad. Has a Kafkaesque feel to it to me, a roundabout, yet still slap in the face kind of obviousness to it.
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This is very well written, but I found it rather depressing. Still, it is very thought provoking.
~Lee -
Oh wow! This was so good.
Great subject to write on.
I deffinately agree with cristos about
it flowing. It fit perfectly.
Ths gets high stars from me.
Wonderful work. Come bye and read
mine sometime. I would love to see
what you think! ~Jess
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everything fits perfectly...this was made the way it was for a reason...i love how the pendelummed entwined with how the clock was ticking...it keeps the same images flowing through my head...but in a different context...i'm no good at interpretting poetry, but i got what he was saying...nice
peace
chris -
What a truly strong and sad piece. That irony of seeing something that takes away the thoughts of being able to stay in a moment forever. An interesting read for sure- thanks for sending us along this path to review this one.
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There is much said in a few lines. At times I guess we all hear the clock. but when face to face, it is only the moment that counts. The fear of separation is very real at certain times in our lives.
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This has such a strong impact. The words so precise, moving it on to it's final thought.
Creative in its formatting.
All of it contributes to the depth of it's subject matter.
Maddie -
This short poem expresses effectively how the poet relates to the idea of time. Time can eventually lead to alterations, interruptions, fractures. Whatever be the state or condition, it is liable to change. And happiness does not escape this reality.
Such a thought can sometimes cross anybody's mind, I would imagine. And this short poem might reflect either a moment of melancholy caused by the realization of fleeting time, or a constant haunting thought that prevents the poet from living the instant. -
I love Spikes stuff......just not this piece.
I mean of course it's "well-written, blah, blah blah"
But it's just too depressing for my taste, doubly so because he is usually so upbeat and humorous. Stuck with the stereotype I suppose.
Kyla -
Excellent!
This is a poem that I had to re-read, mostly because I'm semi-retarded. But, I really enjoyed this poem! This actually made me think!
Awesome!
Stephanie -
It's amazing that some of us are always aware that nothing is unending. Time is marching by bringing us to one end or another. While others seem to live life in the moment, never considering that at any moment they may find someone they love missing. I wish I could be like that, but instead I see the clock. One poem I wrote has the line “in my heart I know, that time with you is fleeting” but with the one you love forever is fleeting and comes too soon. The poem is beautifully haunting.
Patti
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Excellent
This is a touching piece. One can hear the sand fall through the hourglass. Wonderful thought provoking write
~Johnny -
Hmm this is like waiting for the expected to come, but you wait and wait and the clock never stops. How long can you wait?
Lakota -
we all answer to time - it is how we measure our moments, our lives. it is what claims our spirits when our bodies can no longer hold on.
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Hmmm perilously close to your face would stop a clock… such morbid thoughts cloud the moment in a self for filling prophecy…
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