Through pleasant paths, through dainty ways,
Love leads my feet;
Where beauty shines with living rays,
Soft, gentle, sweet;
The placid heart at random strays,
And sings, and smiles, and laughs and plays,
And gathers from the summer days
Their light and heat,
That in its chambers burn and blaze
And beam and beat.
I throw myself among the ferns
Under the shade,
And watch the summer sun that burns
On dell and glade;
To thee, my dear, my fancy turns,
In thee its Paradise discerns,
For thee it sighs, for thee it yearns,
My chosen maid;
And that still depth of passion learns
Which cannot fade.
The wind that whispers in the night,
Subtle and free,
The gorgeous noonday's blinding light,
On hill and tree,
All lovely things that meet my sight,
All shifting lovelinesses bright,
Speak to my heart with calm delight,
Seeming to be
Cloth'd with enchantment, robed in white,
To sing of thee.
The ways of life are hard and cold
To one alone;
Bitter the strife for place and gold —
We weep and groan:
But when love warms the heart grows bold;
And when our arms the prize enfold,
Dearest! the heart can hardly hold
The bliss unknown,
Unspoken, never to be told —
My own, my own!
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This poem to me meant that the author is finding love and uses nature as his metaphor. Love can mean so many different things to people and to me he is describing his love. For the author, this poem touches the heart. He is describing what his love is like and to not to be alone and let strife be around. This poem to me felt soft, gentle, and sweet just as he described in his poem. I also felt lots of love while reading this poem and that made me smile and made me feel warm inside. As for the technical part of this, I found two things that stood out to me. The first is that when he said, "And when our arms the prize enfold," I seemed to be confused. Maybe if it was changed to And when in our arms the prize enfolds. I am not really sure about this but I just feel that does not make much sense to me, maybe it does and I just don't see it. The other part that I noticed was when he said, "Dearest! the heart can hardly hold". I think maybe there should be a capital after the '!' as it is the start of a new sentence. The rhyming was excellent and did not seem forced at all, very natural. The imagery was excellent as I could picture everything that was said very well. My overall opinion of this poem is that this is a very well done poem. It seems that the poem was very well thought out and it came out wonderfully. This is a very powerful poem with a great message to it. When I first read the poem I thought it was going to be like the same style of love poetry but this was very different and very unique. Personally, I feel that the ending of the poem could have ended a bit better but what is there now is fine. It just seemed a little sudden. Lots of effort was put into this to make it a strong poem, showing the beauty of it. This poem was very pleasant to read. A great title for this poem as it describes the poem wonderfully. Good job and very well done! I really enjoyed reading this poem.
May the colours of the rainbow follow you always.
Smiles always,
Kristina
Edited on Jul 18, 2:12 p.m. because ''.
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