the tree cut,
dawn breaks early
at my little window
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The first line seems to be the branches that rub up against the window which would explain the second two lines; as if the wind made him wake up a bit earlier than when dawn would have woken him up.
That's my perception of the piece and that is what I am taking away from it.
A nice piece that Shiki has written here.
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for me this says that a tree was cut down, exposing the window to early light. It is a moment in time, a physical description with a strong juxtaposition, something that makes you catch your breath. The first line doesn't necessarily lead us to expect the second and third. (It worked with you :-)) Then there the deeper layers to be looked for and thought about. What symbol in our lives might that cutting of a tree be, what is exposed unexpectedly or sooner than it might otherwise be when something is lost. Haiku have many layers and are an interaction with the reader, we have to join the poet to achieve the full potential of the work. And no it doesn't have to be 5/7/5!
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Haiku do not have to be 5, 7, 5 , that was a miconception. They are about a scene in time. Haikumonk can explain it to you in more depth.
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haikus go over my head completely. i though t it had to be 5 syllables, 7, then 5 again ? and what is the tree cuting ?the glass? i'm confused.
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This speaks at so many levels... besides the fact the tree that had given a recluse seclusion is now missing..... and the sun goes right through the window. Quaint scene...... how I miss a tree when cut.... this is a perfect example of a haiku with solid resonance...
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Indeed. It feels like this every morning in my neck of woods. Night is never long enough
Must read more of Shiki's haiku
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The tree that was the cause of appearance of dawn fro the window was cut and it is felt that the dawn arrived earlier. Very beautiful observation of an insignificant happening mixed with a great daily event! I like this Haiku so much!
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As sound disturbs the slumber, aninteresting sound to wake to, could be good or bad I enjoyed this reflective piece.
Andrew
Edited on Apr 14, 7:57 because ''.
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