I do not know the day
my pain will end yet
in the little garden
I had them plant
seeds of autumn flowers
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If they planted seeds of autumn flowers, autumn is usually a symbol for dying - I do see this as a death bed, a realization that it is his time or what he would want that time to be like...
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I think this is a great poem about not letting anything distract one from the spiritual pathway and accepting whatever comes to one including pain and eventual death. There are layers and layers of meaning here too numerous to put down but one could go for a long time. Putting autumn seeds could also mean burying seeds that will germanate in the spring way after winter and winter here could mean the poet's death. As I said lots and lots of layers to enjoy....
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Awwwwwww. This is such a good write. It's so short, but it doesn't need to be any longer. I don't see this as a death bed either. I'm gonna be really honest when I say that the last line, indeed confuses me a little. Maybe it's cause I'm not as deep as some of the others, but that just got me off guard there.
The suspense of the first line is working.. I like that. This old poem is very interesting and I enjoyed reading it, and I hope everyone else reads this also. 
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Lost-boy,
Shiki really did feel this way. His pain finally ended on September 19th,1902, after suffering from the spinal caries that had afflicted him since 1895.
Andrew
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beautiful images .
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THis is a very good writing. I hope you don't really feel that way. But this is really deep. I truly like it. Keep up the good work
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It definately seems to be fatal, even if the artist doesn't think so. Perhaps it is severe depression, maybe suicidal? Or perhaps the artist is looking forward to a change in his/her life, the death of the former body, and the life of the autumn flowers. But it's a thought provoking poem nonetheless.
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I do not see this as a death bed. I see the artist trapped by his affliction, still planting, still with dreams of cultivation. Of course i do not know the artist, but reading this, it is hopeful of respite, probably from a melancholia or other debilitation mental disease. could of course be fatal.
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Optimism? Lying on his death-bed, he plans for the future garden.
Only with the end drawing close do we seem to become aware of the need for continuation. A very thought provoking and contenplative piece.
I liked this one.
Andrew
Edited on May 21, 10:17 because ''.
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