'It's over!'
Upon me drizzle
Falls and with my years
Even your words, too,
Have turned sere.
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Yep Nam - its just you :-) - this is a deeply sad tanka, when at the end of life everything has gone sour and even what was joyful has been lost.
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This reads like one of those teen-angst poems you read so much of. Where it is just the cliche attribute of itself and really it goes nowhere but in the emotion that it is presented in.
But, maybe that is just me.
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