The spring breeze melted snow on the hills then quickly disappeared.
I wish I could borrow it briefly to blow over my hair
And melt away the ageing frost forming now about my ears.
Notes
Poetic Form: Sijo
sijo-adaptation by Dr. Larry C. Gross, PhD.
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Brilliant poem. Fishing was probably a lot better in Korea 700 years ago, perhaps he was eager to try his luck at the lake.
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this is a strange piece...i don't really like it personally, but it is a good example of old asian poetry. i'm not into the old fashioned and just plain old style. nice job though!
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This was really good. Sijo? Ahh... it's great your trying an less common approach, alwayz searching for something new. Very nice job!
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Well I wish I could barrow it to. I have alot of gray myself.
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I think this piece is alright> I it indeed too short but it sounds okay. Thank you for sharing and may you have a bless day
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