Someone is at the door again, my weeping heart, no, no one
Perhaps a passerby, who will go somewhere else
The night has passed, waiting, the star-dust is settling
Sleepy candle-flames are flickering in distant palaces
Every pathway has passed into sleep, tired of waiting
Alien dust has smudged all traces of footsteps
Blow out the candles, let the wine and cup flow
Close and lock your sleepless doors
No one, no one will come here now.
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Well one thing is obvious, whether professional poet or AllPoetry dabbler, there's a steady stream of "woe is me."
True it's better written. Just me I guess, but it just seems a bit self-indulgent, unless of course I'm missing something deeper. -
'alien dust has smudged all footsteps', wild!
This was an enjoyable morning read, lots of emotion and waiting and sadness... -
First I have heard of this poet - quite a sad poem really, someone very alone and yet seems to long for someone to enter. Seems one can take this even deeper and think it could be metaphoric for something else - the heart perhaps?
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definitely sounds like the person was unlucky in love...
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Fading from the light....
Faiz has done well in capturing the hesitant hope and then the cascading despair of loneliness with his words, "Someone is at the door again...no, no one" and, " tired of waiting...blow out the candles...no one will come here now." A feeling of a sad, empty person talking to himself. The reader is given the sense of darkness approaching, but not just the natural kind, an even deeper dark..."close and lock your sleepless doors"...that perhaps no one will ever come. -
This is a lovely poem. A first that I am reading by Faiz Ahmed Faiz and now I have developed a sense of immense liking and respect for this poet. It's very simple, but yet not simple. A lot to understand, a lot to feel.
A very good piece, I must conclude.
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That was one of the best poems I have ever read.
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this is a really good poem i'll be looking out for more poems written by you
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this is really really relly kool. i lyke it alot. becuz u r very good and very crative and very neat and very nice soundin. i wish i new u but i probably werent born yet. lol u r really good at writing and i no u cant c this but u relly relly relly r. and i wish u had more works becuz ur poems rok. i lubv them to death. and u r really cool becuz i can tell by ur poetry
i bet we could have been very kool friends but i guess i wasnt born yet. LOL thanks whoever put this poem up. u also rok lyke i said be4 LOL LOL
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Another error, I find quite a few errors on the poems that don't get too much commenting on. But, maybe that is just me.
Anyways, in this line: 'Alien dust has sumdged all traces of footsteps' I believe that 'sumdged' is 'smudged'
I like this piece better than the other 'Lamenting Caricature' I read by this author, this one is better written in my view. It shows much more in imagery and thought.
A good piece that this author has written here.
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