Because our talk was of the cloud-control
And moon-track of the journeying face of Fate,
Her tremulous kisses faltered at love's gate
And her eyes dreamed against a distant goal:
But soon, remembering her how brief the whole
Of joy, which its own hours annihilate,
Her set gaze gathered, thirstier than of late,
And as she kissed, her mouth became her soul.
Thence in what ways we wandered, and how strove
To build with fire-tried vows the piteous home
Which memory haunts and whither sleep may roam,—
They only know for whom the roof of Love
Is the still-seated secret of the grove,
Nor spire may rise nor bell be heard therefrom.
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wow, this is gorgeous with all its metaphors and all . i enjoyed my sef there while reading it. well written it was a very pleasant experience.
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This was so beautifully written. The metaphors used in this were amazing, everything was worded wonderfully. I'll be coming back to this one to read it again sometime.
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You've actually written this in a way I could understand, with an intelligent use of metaphors. Gosh!
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wow i loved this sonnet, i love the metaphors, and the use of language, it was powerful, and a really gd read
well done
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Sierra
The sonnet you mention is a Shakspearian sonnet, the sonnet use by Dante is a variant of the Petrarchan sonnet (I believe).
Alas Dante can no longer work on his poetry as he died in 1882 and has been refered to as one of the worlds best sonnet writers, parable with Shakespeare himself.
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This was good!!!I loved it and here is what i really like the wonderful flow,the way you could understand it,even the wonderful way it was written but it was all good.I felt lucky to read this piece of work no lie anyway I hope to read others soon.good job again thanks for sharing
sadie
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This would've been a great poem if you had actually followed the rules of writing a sonnet. The rhyme scheme should be ABABCDCDEFEFGG, not ABBACDDCEFFEGH. Maybe you should work on it. Other than that, it was an excellent poem.
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