The world was made when a man was born,
He must taste for himself the forbidden springs;
He can never take warning from old-fashion'd things;
He must fight as a boy, he must drink as a youth,
Of the friend of his soul; he must laugh to scorn
The hints of deceit in a woman's eyes
They are clear as the wells of Paradise.
And so he goes on till the world grows old,
Till his toung has grown cautious, his heart has grown cold,
Till the smile leaves his mouth, till the ring leaves his laugh,
And he shirks the bright headache you ask him to quaff.
He grows formal with men, and with women polite,
And distrustful of both when they're out of his sight.
Then he eats for his palate and drinks for his head,
And loves for his pleasure,and 'tis time he was dead.
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This is an excellent poem, it truly tells life how it is, and how men grow up. Saying this is a cold, bitter poem doesn't mean it doesn't tell the truth. I've seen enough of men to agree with the author.
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I'm glad all men do not end up like this very bleak portrait projects. I question the connection of a woman's deceit being as clear as the wells in Paradise. I like the idea of the world being made when man was born because it implies that the world came into its fullest potential with the arrival of the creation of man. I also agree that man tends to learn things the hard way instead of learning from past histories. The last stanza leaves me a bit cold. There is bitterness in the life that remains in the man, and by the end of it, there is no joy that has been given the man from the world that was "created" for him. This poem paints a cycle of sameness, with a drab conclusion.
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Wow, this guy really knows what he's saying. And like the title, "Experience" is what he really wants to embellish upon this poem. It's kind of like the one by Shakespeare "Seven ages of Man".. But I'm kinda guessing that this guy was a genius right here. Or a genius in the making... Something like that. Just checking on all his work right now. Seem to be really interested in him. So, you'll probably see me on all the posts of this guy. -
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The first line is a bit an ego trip don't you think? The world was around before 'man' and it will be around after 'man'.
Spelled 'tongue' as 'toung' and I think from the rest of the spelling that is an error on your part, not something I believe you did on purpose.
Other than that, a lovely piece here.
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