If I could write words
Like leaves on an autumn forest floor,
What a bonfire my letters would make.
If I could speak words of water,
You would drown when I said
"I love you."
If I could write words
Like leaves on an autumn forest floor,
What a bonfire my letters would make.
If I could speak words of water,
You would drown when I said
"I love you."
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From guest Triptronick (contact)
I first stumbled across this poem when I was about 17. Think it was when doing some English homework. It stayed with me even when I couldn't remember it (if that makes sense) and when I rediscovered it last year I was delighted. I wish I could've written something some so poweful and beautiful. -
This was a man who's passions were endless, so deep they had no bottom or top, a mind that could spin so easily out of control and a heart led by eyes that saw too far and too deep. Such an elemental nature could only be described thus.
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It's at least a different way of writing the same thing that's been written innumerable times. And it does suggest that frustration those of us who can't write in an ornate manner about love and emotion, struggle with..."If I could" is how it begins, because he can't...though he sort of did...holy paradox. lol
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This is a very good example when short is enough.
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nice uh
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I just cannot agree with those who feel this poem is too short.
He fits into 6 lines enough words to fill one's heart and soul - words to fall back on when feeling unhappy or lonely. The depth of love is infinite. 'Words of Water' not needed here - the poet says what he feels in his heart and that should be enough for anyone to hear.
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From guest bob fox (contact)
If I could began to find the courage to write of such love it would mean that I have the courage to love -
Wow to receive such a love letter as this - would make one feel like the most special person on this earth.
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If I Could Write Words
From guest Ewan Wilson (contact)
This really is a beautifully distilled encapsualtion of what it is to love! His allusion to leaves on the forest floor conjures up the sheer superfluity of affection love creates..as abundant as forest leaves! He then reinforces the imagery with his idea of a bonfire which perfectly expresses the raging emotions of the lover to his beloved. Finally he repeats this with his water and drowning allusion. Delicious stuff that anyone who has loved or does love passionately will empathise with immediately. -
From guest suseann
This author and this amazing short powerful verse he's composed. Is intended to move the emotions of the reader and it does infact. I like his eyes. From the image provided and through his insight too. -
Delightful
From guest Pockets (contact)
Simple, elegant, heartfelt. One of the things I like best about it is how it also serves as an excellent example of the soul of poetry and shows how two short, sparse statements can convey and support an emotion so very much larger than it would seem. -
Wow this is a really nice piece.. I really think that it is truly short, but sweet.
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that is beautiful if someone said that to me i would be flattered however i do not think it is an amazing work of art
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Wow...I'm practicaly speechless. Such simplicity yet such a surge of feeling. Woo...
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awww so cute and beautifu llovely
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It's okay!
It's short and to the point I just want to learn to read and so I can get inspired to write my kind of poetry. -
no material but to relate
"If I could write words" is not concomprising not composing at all because poor for precision of comparison. But might it be better open for discussion when the characters aren't exact as a stack that can be for a town's impact but rather inimate yet weighted and it was for me.
This has me think of a spread out over time understanding, but can spend quickly if had that millionth term of what's branching in a portfolio of relationship that can with family reach winter feelings in enigmatic times. The densest decisions might be gotten off the chest, it seems though. Vibrancy of oranges of new highlights could turn into flames if raked too soon also.
It all makes me think of nth way of being in love, how it might not make one cry but you cry nevertheless to bring improvement where refreshment and strength need balance and even among lectures at reality.
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If I could write words
From guest Sophie_boo*:) (contact)
Hey I just wanted to drop by and look for a very good love poem...and when i came here, i knew i would be good...i love it!!! It really relates to my life!!! It was amazing when I read it...I showed it to my boyfriend, and He said He Loved me!!! thankz for writing something so special!! -
awesome!
From guest courtney (contact)
this peom speaks to the person who is reading it. its amazing and a piece of work to be very proud of.It is short and simple but so true. i love it -
I love it
From guest Debby (contact)
I just love this poem, I disovered it over 30 years ago and use it every valentines day in my Husbands card. pity it isn't slightly longer tho. -
Sweet.
This poem is really sweet. It's short too but that's okay because it's really sweet & full of emotions. I love it. Great job. ♥ -
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From guest sian richards (contact)
omg this is so sweet i love it its like my poetry shorter than mine but yea -
Sweet.
This is a sweet write. It's short but that's alright because it's sweet & full of emotions. Great job. -
SIMPLE BUT BEAUTIFUL
SAYS ENOUGH TO DRAW UP ALOT OF EMOTIONS -
simply sweet
From guest barbara (contact)
I like the imagery these simple words project. very nice & thoughtfully written -
This is awesome because somehow in just a few words he creates something so beautiful that it leaves you wanting more, you know? Like it's so short and somehow simple in a way, but there's this kind of power to it nonetheless. This is beyond awesome.
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Short
This is simple, short and yet filled with enough emotion to touch my heart. I think that this poem is a great example of how to truly express ones love. -
Spike "If I could write words"
Beautiful, beautiful poetry. Spike was a troubled soul in life, but a genious withal. This poem stands as a legacy to that genius. The good that men do lives after them. Spike made a lot of people happy while alive and with this offering he reaches back from beyond the grave. -
Wonderful
Such a simple way to express such a complex feeling. This poem is superb. -
love
From guest carmel (contact)
love love love so hard to explain. Spike just says it in one hit.good on you spikexxxxxxxxxxxxxxx -
love
From guest carmel (contact)
sometimes i find love hard to express when spike says a few words there! its said, with great understanding. -
WOW!
my Nan talks about Spike Milligan, this is Kool. -
This is a typical clever Milligan. I think he was in one of his melancholy meditative moods when he wrote this.
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WOW.
Something so beautiful...
My first trek to Oldpoetry and I found something I may have fallen in love with.
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In Love
I think I have falling in love with Spike Milligan now...wow -
lovely
this is beautiful.. I was really drowned in the words.. amazing poetry.. -
I Am Drowned
This is an extra ordinary beautiful expression of love, the greatest wonder of the world. the imagery of the magnanimity of love is superb. A very simple and sweet poem -
Words of love from a man known for his mania. Priceless emotions, beautiful serene feeling.
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