In summer's heat and mid-time of the day
To rest my limbs upon a bed I lay,
One window shut, the other open stood,
Which gave such light, as twinkles in a wood,
Like twilight glimpse at setting of the sun,
Or night being past, and yet not day begun.
Such light to shamefast maidens must be shown,
Where they must sport, and seem to be unknown.
Then came Corinna in a long loose gown,
Her white neck hid with tresses hanging down:
Resembling fair Semiramis going to bed
Or Layis of a thousand wooers sped.
I snatched her gown, being thin, the harm was small,
Yet strived she to be covered there withal.
And striving thus as one that would be chaste,
Betrayed herself, and yeilded at the last.
Stark naked as she stood before mine eye,
Not one wen in her body could I spy.
What arms and shoulders did I touch and see,
How apt her breasts were to be pressed by me.
How smooth a belly under her waist saw I?
How large a leg, and what a lusty thigh?
To leave the rest, all liked me passing well,
I clinged her naked body, down she fell,
Judge you the rest, being tired she bade me kiss,
Jove sent me more such afternoons as this.
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I found no errors in this piece, so I can't really critique it. But, it did give me quite an image.
What it gave me was an image of a guy laying in a hammock and just watching the day pass him by, and then he sees by the riverbed or a lake that there is a girl readying herself to take a bath or a swim of some sort and he watches her, then she sees him and as in a dream she kisses him and then wisks away.
That is the image that I got from this piece, and it wasn't sexual to me, it was sensual, and tho on the 'characters' part I feel a dream it was lovely none-the-less.
As I stated I find no errors with this piece, it is an excellent piece.
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