may i feel said he
(i'll squeal said she
just once said he)
it's fun said she
(may i touch said he
how much said she
a lot said he)
why not said she
(let's go said he
not too far said she
what's too far said he
where you are said she)
may i stay said he
which way said she
like this said he
if you kiss said she
may i move said he
is it love said she)
if you're willing said he
(but you're killing said she
but it's life said he
but your wife said she
now said he)
ow said she
(tiptop said he
don't stop said she
oh no said he)
go slow said she
(cccome?said he
ummm said she)
you're divine!said he
(you are Mine said she)
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how gay
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Oh e. e. cummings, how we love you! So simple and yet so profound: to get a tryst boiled down to so few words. But it is a lot like that, isn't it? -
This was fun said he
for which one said she?
Well that's why Cummings wrote the poem and not me, lol. As odd as it is, it's more pleasant than a lot of his stuff to read.
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mm,
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well that was a little awkward. its like the poet is trying to go two different ways with this. -
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This is great! He's such an amazing poet. I love the captilization of mine in the end.
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A very interesting poem. Maye not my all time favorite, but it is good.
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i love this poem
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Lovely. With a touch of humour and very dynamic at the same time.
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I love this poem, it is an adulterated poem, that makes you think.
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Some of the brackets seem out of place. I think their use is unnecessary and disruptive to the dialogue which is crafted with wit and understanding.
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My all time favorite poem!
I think this is a great poem. It is different from any other poem, and the passion that He and She feel for each other is so powerful, that you can feel it only by reading the title of the poem. "May I feel?" Hah, what a stupendous question...love it, it's brilliant. -
something different
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Well that's a long monorhyme
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it's a strange one. said she said he said she said he. he hehe great write!
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This is a very nice dialogue between he and she. I think they both are a bit naughty and romantic too. The poet has given an edge to she. Very sweet poem.
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I can see why you said you have always especially liked this one Kimberly. I will start here then to read some of the old poets that way we can bounce interpretations off of one another. Thank you for helping find my way around here. I probably never would havevisited if you hadn't pointed out some of the good things here. This is wonderful, just like you said.
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haha...this really is very cute. I really like how such simple language can be used in such a creative way, and so effectively too.
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ohhh, this is definatly one of my favorite poems as of now. lol. it was amazing and i love the flow. kepe it up!
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This is one of my absolute favorites. The back and forth banter always puts me into a fit of giggles. I can picture this perfectly in my mind, being played out in a movie scene at in a darkened corner of a cafe. I couldn't help but look at see if you guys had it posted here. Great job Old Poetry team!
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This is so cheeky and I love it. It has a hint of 'naughtiness
' about it, the banter between the two people is almost comical.
I enjoyed reading this.
Von
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