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A Visit To The Asylum

Once from a big, big building,
When I was small, small,
The queer folk in the windows
Would smile at me and call.

And in the hard wee gardens
Such pleasant men would hoe:
"Sir, may we touch the little girl's hair!" —
It was so red, you know.

They cut me coloured asters
With shears so sharp and neat,
They brought me grapes and plums and pears
And pretty cakes to eat.

And out of all the windows,
No matter where we went,
The merriest eyes would follow me
And make me compliment.

There were a thousand windows,
All latticed up and down.
And up to all the windows,
When we went back to town,

The queer folk put their faces,
As gentle as could be;
"Come again, little girl!" they called, and I
Called back, "You come see me!"

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  • ecrivain01
    March 17, 2008
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    This is a great poem ...

    and I see nothing in it that "doesn't work". I'd say it's a very good job, all in all.

  • Nam
    March 4, 2004
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    The third verse flows perfectly. The first verse doesn't really hit in the rhythm until the second one and the rest after the third one doesn't really keep the flow in a perfect unison. But, it is a lovely piece none-the-less.