A young spring-tender girl
combed her joyous hair
'You are very ugly' said the mirror.
But,
on her lips hung
a smile of dove-secret loveliness,
for only that morning had not
the blind boy said,
'You are beautiful'?
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From guest Maia Barrett (contact)
My daughter is in eighth grade, just at that age when girls starts worrying more about their looks more and more and less about what is on the inside. However, a few days ago I went into her room to get her laundry and I saw a copy of this poem taped up on her wall beside her mirror. The irony of this poem beside her mirror has been one of the best surprises I've had recently. Thank you. -
I have always liked Spike milligans work, it is telling us that maybe we all see but never look any deeper..........................
Beauty is as they say only skin deep, inner beauty to me is more important than anything, without that you are shallow, this is how I saw this, a wonderful write..............................
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Edited on Jul 21, 3:55 p.m. because ''. -
Tho, I have already commented on this piece, I will comment again.
This gave me the impression that the Mirror, is truthful and probably the only 'thing' in her life that is.
Though, that doesn't mean the boy who says she's beautiful, means she isn't, to him she could just be beautiful. He probably sees past the physical, which only the mirror can see.
It's a learned lesson piece I feel.
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First of all, I like the phrase "spring tender". It describes her youth quite effectively. I love the imagery, and the conflict between the mirror's testament, and the blind boy's. There's an aura of beautiful innocence surrounding the girl, hinting conflictingly at both naivette and deeper wisdom. That reflects in the whole of the poem, the mirror reflecting shallowly, and the boy reflecting true wisdom. I agree with glazecovered that the third line would flow better if broken up. This is a very lovely piece, with a great flow, and well broken up.
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The story between the outside and inside beauty and what really matters in such a short piece. Very well written, free verse really helps this poem. "But" stands by itself like a line between inside and outside beauty. I really like the phrase "joyous hair", it makes the whole piece more alive and brings true uniqueness to it. "a smile of dove-secret loveliness" is a great way to describe a smile. The only thing I think can be changed is the third line being broken into two parts. I would be more effective that way, I think.
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No errors do I see. A simplistic piece, not your best but it does have insightfulness in it and a 'story'. In such a short piece.
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