SatuRn

• Last seen on Feb 13 10:19 AM 2006. Member since February 14, 2006.
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• on Signior Dildo by Lord John Wilmot, on June 12, 2004

  awe! i feel so blessed to have read this. who featured it? because that individual is a GENIUS second only to the author of this fabulous and enjoyable poem! excellent!
• on Inferno (English) by Dante Alighieri, on June 6, 2004

  Canto 1
  I rise to the awkward challenge of critiquing Dante. It is easily a wonderful write, even in so few words- masterful. The translation seems to lose some of what must have been early excellence, delving in to choppy grammar and wording to eek out rhythm and rhyme, but it is still wondrous. Also, as a romantic, I find the proceedings of the piece plausible
  
  Canto 2
  This butchered term, &Aelig;neas, appears early in the Canto? could use to be corrected. Otherwise, also lovely. It is still quite wordy, and it becomes rather hard to know who is speaking, with all the layered quotes. The final lines are a bit like a summary, and make it clear what has transpired and what will.
  
  Canto 3
  All hope renounce, ye lost, who enter here! It has suffered a bit of a fall from grace, into common and colloquial use, reaching rock bottom when we posted it on the door of the history room. Still wordy, still wonderful.
  
  Canto 4
  ?not fear, but anguish at the issuing cry so pales me? powerful stuff coming from the respected lips of virgil. A very black and white viewing of things. The Limbo is one of the most interesting levels, by sin, not by punishment...
  
  Canto 5 ? 9
  Upper hell, sins of incontinence
  Natural elements prevail- wind, water, earth.
  Punishments sometimes seem organized by intensity and not a direct relationship with the crime. The City of Dis offers a level of complexity to the tale, as does the arrival of the Furies or the Heavenly messenger.
  
  Canto 9 ? 11
  Lower Hell, Sins of Speculation
  More natural elements- Fire. The long-winded and roundabout style continues to make dialogue most difficult of all aspects to comprehend. Also, a clever reference to sight in age, foresight and far recollections- very intriguing. Helpful, though possibly too late for a few confused minds, description of the organization of hell by Virgil.
  
  Canto 12 ? ?
  Lower Hell, Sins of Malice- Violence
  The danger presented by the Minator is clear and helps to demonstrate that this is not an entirely passive and safe journey of immunity. Varying levels of punishment in the blood and sand, but no such variance appears clearly in the middle circle, the unnatural wood.
  
  Um? STUTTER! Missing pieces!!! What passes here?
  Yes, a shame a shame for missing is the scene that inspired me to read the book. The sheer power of it, on the discovery channel, is the only reason I remembered the name, Dante, and that alone did I recall? but for the image. I was only in fifth grade- What can you expect? Tydeus and Menilappus. What more powerful scene than that?
  I guess the entry is incomplete (forgivable, it is an epic).
  Overall, it is nothing more or less than Divine. (not very comedic in a modern sense) And I, perhaps in youth and naivete, hold to the belief that these ideas arose from the mind of Dante himself and from no other source, and that is a commendable thing. There are, after all, a lot of gloriously presented ideas.
  
• on The Files by Rudyard Kipling, on June 5, 2004

  haha this is awesome! i prefer the stacks to the files, the old piles and piles of aged and ancient journals in medical libraries.... sigh... some are just haunting... the rooms themselves tend to be terrifying... once, the elevator broke down... (long story... back to files)
  yes, a lovely poem... i caught no definite rhmye scheme, but the erratic one seemed lovely for the nature of the piece... i sang it, though i am tone deaf. it went well! lovely lovely poem... very fun to read!
• on A Castaway by Augusta Davies Webster, on June 5, 2004

  HA! what a closing! the piece loops back on itself many timers, tying all its statements in with earlier and later ones... very wonderful! my favorite ideas were "god put too many women in the world" especially with the authors cynical take on the woman and her dead child, and her own brother- the reference to the sea. this really made the title 'castaway' real and more concrete for me, even though it was,in turn, based on something abstract. it is a monster of a poem- extremely long, but somehow akin to my own thoughts in prolonged times of loneliness... (no i am not a beautiful grown woman, mother of a dead baby, and wasted flesh, not in anyone's opinion) i also sit and think and read old writings, wondering if i can take back all the growing fate has sent me through..
  a wonderful, LONG, piece... wow.